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Old 07-01-2009, 08:14 AM
h22w h22w is offline
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Default my Cover letter - Comments are welcome

Hey Guys,

I joining from Germany. Well, finding a job nowadays is very hard. I have send out several applications but still haven't a job until now - so I decided to apply to foreign companys. I would appriciate, if you can look over my application.
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Dear Ms. Gary
Director of Personal
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Dear Ms. Gary:

From your advertisement at the webpage XYZ.com, I learned about your need for a Financial Controller. Concerning my future planning and my personal interest, I have been seeking just such an opportunity, which gives me not only the chance to work in the field of my interests, exclusive cost-earnings accounting, but also for a multinational company.

Within my studyies i have specialised on controlling, in particular in calculating projects, liquidity planning, cost-earnings accounting and preparing and presentation of controlling reports. After graduating in business sciences at the „XYZ (Germany)“ in autumn 2008 i have successfully completed and been certificated in two trainings concerning „Cotrolling and Accounting with mySAP ERP 2005“. I am familiar with the Microsoft office package and the SAP Reporting tools, like Report-Painter and Report-Writer.

As a team member of your organization, I can provide:

• Efficiency, reliability, accurancy with numbers.
• Maturity, honesty, ability to look at challanges as opportunities
• Ability to develop an lead a team.
• Ability to plan, organize and execute a projects/plans.

For fully details of my qualifications you can call up my resume which I have uploaded to Kariyer.net. I will call your office next week concerning any questions you may have and to arrange a meeting. Of course, you may contact me directly at any time. Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely
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that's all folks...
Comments are welcome.

CU Harry
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Old 07-02-2009, 04:16 AM
rickygips rickygips is offline
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Default a little editing

I think you need to have a little editing and a spelling check. You need to be more formal in your cover letter, more than conversational.
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Old 07-02-2009, 06:02 AM
h22w h22w is offline
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can you just give me concrete examples?! Iam not an native speaker, therefore it is hard for me to find out what u exactly mean.

regards

Harry
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